Friday Fictioneers: Missing Bella

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.

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This week’s photo: Copyright:Jean L. Hays

And now my 100 word story:

It’s just a habit I can’t seem to break. Every time I walk by that little window in the hall I peek out and look for her. I know she’s not there. She’s been gone a year now. Each time I look and don’t see her I am reminded and I feel a stab to my heart. Why do I still do it? You’d think it’s because I forget but that’s not it because sometimes I consciously go through the dining room to avoid that window. Perhaps it is time for a new dog to join our family.

22 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Missing Bella

      • I’m glad in a way that you didn’t do a child. It’s not the trope that concerns me — I feel the dog is most appropriate here.
        “Every time I walk by that little window in the hall I peek out and look for her. I know she’s not there. She’s been gone a year now.”
        The language suggests the missing one is not human, as a person wouldn’t simply stay in one place, where one could find them from looking out the window.
        Perhaps I’m looking at it too hard, but I really applaud the entire thing. Great work.

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  1. Our dogs have truly become family members. The loss of our Callie a few years ago, was so hard. She was 1 year older than my youngest son, and we all grieved. You capture it beautifully, Dawn… and from the comments it sounds like you don’t have a dog? Wow, great job!

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  2. There’s something about doors or windows that have all us writers writing about loss. Why?! But I’m glad yours was about a dog. I have one of my own and I wish I could have him forever. Great twist and really very touching, Dawn!

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  3. I find it very interesting that you used what is a circle – a blue (abstract + concrete) circle – to ‘frame’ your story. An image through which to see another image and ‘past life’. The circle has many deep meanings, symbolically, one of which is to do with ‘eternity’ and another ‘cycle’ – both are appropriate in your story. And it’s like your character is looking through into another world, but that it is not a door with a threshold. It reminds me that every ‘prop’ in a story must be there for a reason. 🙂

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