Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.
This week’s photo: Copyright: Me! 🙂
And now my 100 word story:
I remember the moment he fell in love with me. I was bringing lunch to his job site. It was mid-autumn and I was dressed all in brown; long skirt, boots, sweater on sweater; not his usual type.
I stepped out of my vehicle and I saw it in his eyes. I had never seen such a look. Some might say it was lust. I am okay with that. I felt the same way. An accidental brush of his hand would give me goosebumps.
He looked at me like that for five years and then his eyes began to wander.
One of the problems with lust is it seems to always seek new objects after which to lust. 😦 If you’d have more words, you could have done something about that!
janet
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Or if I was one of those writers who gouged his eyes out!
Snap, I should have thought of that!
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I was thinking the same thing as Janet. That problem could be easily remedied, though my way would probably be darker than yours.
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An eyeball cocktail, perhaps? Here’s looking at you kid 😉
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Dear Dawn,
Great use of the prompt. You’re a woman after my own heart. 😉 Sad that he could fall so easily out of love. A man without depth or character. A story well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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A man without character or depth. Great description!
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Dawn,
I like how you used the picture, so many lamps, so little time. I guess it was only lust, then it was a flame that could quickly dim. Thanks for the picture, by the way. Is this your house?
-David
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No David, it’s the Cathlic outreach program. I was drawn to it because I thought “Wow, that’s a lot of lamps” one of which was a lamp I used to have but broke.
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thank you for the photo, dawn. you have a knack for telling stories that are very honest and real, and with a very strong, believable voice.
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Thanks K.Z. Odd that your comment need moderation. I see you have a new picture, very lovely.
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Great story to go with the photo. She was better off without him, and it sounds as though she’s seen the light now. (Grooooaaaan)!
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Ba dum dump, 😉
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An inreresting story. Sad that this can be reality for some people. Sadder if they’ve married. Thanks for the picture.
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It’s a little startling when you wake up to see your picture being used as the prompt. I’m eager to see where everyone goes with this one.
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Dawn- Good God. I didn’t realize you knew my first husband. Great story.
BTW I love the photo. I have three stories written death, enlightenment and insanity. I just can’t choose. You’re a great muse.
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Haha, I am glad I am good for something! I look forward to reading whichever one you choose.
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Well at least she had a good five years. Good story.
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Thank you.
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what a jerk!
Loved the story….
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Thank you.
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My daughter dated a guy like that. I actually liked him, until she told me about the real jerk behind the charming facade. I thank God every day since she dumped the louse. I gag, just thinking about him.
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This would be the last fellow we would want for our daughters!
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Great photo, Dawn; thanks! Wonderful story and compelling use of the prompt. I am assuming the lamps represent the women, the feelings, the lives, tossed aside? Love this one.
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Thanks Dawn.
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Wait! Wait! You didn’t answer my question…
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Ah fickle chemistry! Fantastic interpretation of the prompt!
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Thanks Riya.
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and it happens. very realistic, and well told story and hopefully all fiction. 😛 thanks for the great photograph too.
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Thank YOU, for taking the time to read and comment.
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Poor woman. I hope she knocks him to the curb and finds someone else.
Cool photo 🙂
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I hope so too!
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Did she poison his food after that?
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Too subtle! 😉
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Your character has a sad tale, but great clarity. She knows when he fell in love, and when his eyes started to wander. I’m not worried about her at all. Thank you for a good story.
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Thank you.
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Dawn,
Multiple phrases jump off my screen here. “Some might say it was lust.” is one of my favorites. I also enjoyed the beginning, different from the usual “I remember the moment I fell in love . . . ” Sad ending, but it works, perhaps even better because of the twist.
Cheers!
Marie Gail
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Thank you Marie Gail
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Hi Dawn,
Great photo. I don’t think you’re a wannabe photographer. Did you also take the photo that headlines your blog? That one is a masterpiece. Your story was a great word portrait. I could see it happening. Ron
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Yes, I did take that photo. Thanks Ron for your wonderful comments.
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Oh that wandering eye caught by the light of other lamps. They’re probably newer and brighter. Same old song. I really enjoyed your story. Love the twist at the end. 🙂
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Thanks Lisa.
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Sigh . . .that always seems to be the way . . . Great story Dawn. I like that you used first person. You quickly drew me in.
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Thanks Linda.
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Lust never last… sad but true… and it tend to find new target… thank you for the intriguing picture.
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But boy if you could bottle it! (Lust that is!) haha
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Lust doesn’t last. Too bad after five years it wasn’t a more lasting connection.
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I started to make it 7, you know what they say about the 7 year itch, but that seemed too long.
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Yeah…I think it worked the way you wrote it. 🙂
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Thanks.
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frist of all, Thank you for the lovely photo. I had a great time with it 🙂
My must admit, my relationship with my wife started as lust. Forty years later I still lust for her, but it’s mostly in my head now. Well written piece, Dawn.
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Thanks for sharing that Ray. I think that is beautiful. Your wife is luckier than she knows.
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I enjoyed your story, Dawn. Oh, lust can be pretty exciting, but it seems difficult to have the level of excitement last. Thanks for the picture this week, too. It’s a great one and inspired a lot of creative stories this week!
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Thank you sweetie for your generous comments.
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Ah sad-lust for him and love for her!Well,at least they had 5 good years-a long run for lust;-)If his eyes are wandering now,not surprising-men will be men,lol!
A lovely story Dawn and thanks for the photo this week-had a tough time switching my lamp on 😉
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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🙂
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Good story. Five years? Actually it’s very sad. After all, she gave herself to him totally. How frail we are.
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We are, aren’t we. Thanks for commenting Patrick.
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Shows how fickle we humans can be when it comes to our affections. True love is solid. Wonderful take on the prompt 🙂
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How fitting to relationships today this is!
How naive love is for sure..
Loved the story 😀
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Thank you so much.
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Very well told…and thanks for the picture to work with!
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Thank YOU!
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So true. Apparently. Beautifully done.
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Thank you.
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Some people have a short “shelf life”…they’re only good for the short haul not the long one! How do we figure that out though in the beginning…and not the ending?!
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I wish I knew.
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I know…don’t we all.
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Oh Dawn, that last line hit me like a punch in the face! I guess that’s just how life can be, the fiercest fires burn too quickly. 😦
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I guess….
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