Friday Fictioneers: Life’s Journey

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.


This week’s photo: Copyright: Douglas Macllroy

And now my 100 word story:

His mother ran into the room at the sound of six-year-old Dara screaming. She looked at her son who was wearing a diving helmet and giggling.

“Why must you torment her?”
“Because it’s fun” twelve-year-old Griffin said.

“That is not a toy. Go to your room. I want you to think about being a big brother and protecting your little sister.”

Standing in the funeral home Griffin recalled this conversation. He looked at his sister being comforted by the creep she was dating. He reached for her hand and the two of them walked the aisle to where their mother lay.

50 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Life’s Journey

  1. I’m wondering if he’s just realizing he should take some action or if it’s been in his mind but he hasn’t been able to act on it, like Hamlet. And I’m wondering what he will do. Interesting story with a life issue in the balance. Thanks!


  2. Whoa, you loaded the bases then knocked it out of the park. Bring a child up in the way he should go . . . . Even today, I recall instruction from my parents so long ago.


  3. As someone with a younger sister I teased mercilessly, I totally understand. Even though, brothers tease, they’d stand up for their sisters when it really counts. Beautiful story.


  4. It’s good to see that one isolated incident from childhood isn’t representative of his being a bad guy in general. Your story shows quite well that the ultimate result is what counts. His mother did the right thing & it kicked in so well


  5. Gosh Dawn, this is such a wonderful story! I think the brother and sister were on better terms during their life than the helmet incident. You can tell that the brother really, really cares and wants to protect his sister from the ‘no-good creep of a boyfriend’. That was my first concern when the boys grew up, I didn’t want them to be just brothers, but really good friends, and so far, that has worked out. Dawn you did good! Nan 🙂


  6. Finally Griffin understands his responsibility -his mother would have been so proud. I hope Dara listens to him though.A beautifully told story Dawn 🙂


  7. sometimes we wait too late for the little things that become big things. i won’t say “better late than never” because this “late” is way more than just late. unfortunately, that kind of protecting is likely to cause the sister to rebel against him. well done.


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