Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.
This week’s photo: Copyright: Sandra Cook
And now my 100 word story:
Danny hadn’t meant to kill Catrina. He went to her apartment to reason with her. The bitch was taking all his money for child support; support for a child he never wanted.
She had lied about being on the pill and she lied to the judge. Danny had just wanted to reason with her but she laughed at him and he hit her. She went down hard hitting her head on the hearth.
Now he was stuck with a baby that wouldn’t shut up. He had tried everything. Finally he covered her mouth tightly until she was quiet.
The Day After 
Very grim (in a well written way)!
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Thank you.
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So far the vibe of the fiction seems to be evenly split between sentimental and murderous. Grim indeed!
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Well I don’t know whether to be disappointed in myself or proud. I thought people were going to say…”How did you see murder?” But now you tell me its rampant! Oh my…;)
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It’s interesting how themes seem to flow. The last prompt had a lot of crime also.
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I think we Fictioneers are simply a murderous bunch.
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A nightmare scenario to begin with, and it’s steadily getting worse… Strong stuff Dawn.
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Thanks Sandra. Great picture!
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Danny seem to be a bastard that might have caught up with a bitch.. which remind me that I have not killed people in a long time ..
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LOL…you’re welcome 😉
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A very powerful story, from bad to worse in two steps.
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Yes, I don’t know what he is going to do…I ran out of words 😉
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Nice creation you have there. Sleeping with the lights on tonight.
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Thanks Patrick.
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You did an excellent job with this one, Dawn. How did you get there? Maybe the cold of winter, the frost, mimicked by what he did? Cold as his heart? Just my guesses, but who cares? Your story worked well.
janet
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Thank you Janet, yes something like that.
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Yowza! What an awful person Danny is!! He better not get away with any of that!!
Great job, your story really stirred up a lot of emotion for me.
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I appreciate you sharing that with me.
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Ouch, double death from Dawn. Almost too much for 100 words.
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🙂
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Oh dear, seen from the point of view of an accidental killer.
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Yup. But once is maybe an accident..twice..makes a murderer.
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Horrible! Goodness, hope not modelled on someone you know….!
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Actually I did have in mind a murder that happened in our little town 20 years ago and was never solved. The ex-boyfriend in that case was cleared and the baby never was found. So the stump made me think of a baby being buried there but then I thought so close to the bridge, a dog would have found it. Anyway, that’s kind of where this story came from.
Since you asked 😉
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Dear Dawn,
Just children hoping to be loved….
Where have I heard those words before? Your story is chilling and exact and human in every respect. Killer tale
Aloha,
Doug
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🙂
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You get us emotionally involved in the story, get us to hate Danny, then get us to really hate him even more. I think it is safe to say you did your job. 😀
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Thanks PJ.
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You did all the work. 😀 Great story (just chilling). 🙂
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Jeez!!!
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Dawn, I had my eyes closed at the end and I refuse to open them and see what happens to the baby. Ok, that was a lie. Bad bad man.
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Yes he is.
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Oh boy! I kept waiting for at least a slightly happy ending 🙂
Great story.
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Thank you.
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Dear Dawn,
Chilling story. Well done. Cold perfectly describes Danny.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle.
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Chilling story, a lot captured in 100 words Dawn,
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Thank you.
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Bad people, both of them, but Danny is a real piece of work. What a tale, so well told.
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Thank you
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Wow! This man has issues, yes? Very well done.
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Yes he does. Thank you.
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How dark and morbid. Great writing!
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Thanks so much for that generous comment!
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What a bastard! Dark and horrific but one of your most well-written stories, Dawn. Nice work.
All my best,
Marie Gail
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Thank you.
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What a tragic story, Dawn. This little babe has fallen into the wrong hands and is so helpless. Great writing.
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Thanks Amy.
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nicely done. a model of good writing.
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Thank you
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A nasty story well told.
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Great little piece of darkness 🙂
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Thank you Helen.
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One mistake snowballs to many. Danny I feel will suffer the consequences both mental and physical. Well told grisly tale.
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I can’t help but think he will sit in prison only lamenting what he has done to his own life. Isn’t it funny how we can sometimes “know” a character seemingly so well from a 100 word story?
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Absolutely.
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Couldn’t bring myself to hit the “like” button because I didn’t like what was happening… but you wrote it so well to evoke this reaction. If you had a “good job” button, I would have hit (no pun intended for your MC) that.
Randy
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Thanks Randy.
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Oh dear. Great characterisation. Such a chilling tale.
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Thank you.
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Wow! I’ve read about five stories so far, and all are quite morbid. Is it the Friday the 13th thing? But, you’ve written your piece well. Congrats!
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Thank you.
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another grim story but well told
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Thank you.
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Very well written. But scary! He probably won’t stop his murderous streak.
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I think he will be caught soon enough. Although I am a little worried about his mother…. 😉
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Well Dawn this is only my tenth FF read tonight but I think I might have my baseball bat next to the bed. It really is Friday the 13th tonight! 🙂
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It really is!
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🙂
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Ooh…very haunting. Nicely done.
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Thanks Erin.
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Good story, Dawn. I have to wonder what Danny does next. How does he react to the quietness of his”unwanted” child. Is he truly as cold as depicted, does he continue on a cold blooded killer… Or is he filled with regret. Does he try to save the child…. The possibilities.
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I think he disposes the body. buries it somewhere..perhaps at the stump of an old tree.
And there is his humanity, he gives his child a marker for the grave.
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Oh wow! That takes darkness to another level but written with such power.
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Thank you
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Danny strikes me as one of those types of people who paint themselves as the victim. It’s always someone else’s fault. Very written, Dawn.
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I believe you are right, thanks for stopping by.
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Nicely told tale, Dawn, but not a lot of laughs.
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I try but I am not as funny as you.
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This sounds like the stuff you read about so often in the paper and see on TV. There are so many disturbed people in the world. I agree that this was grim but really well written, Dawn. — Suzanne
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…She lied about the pill, she lied to the judge,Danny is pure as the driven snow obviously – not!!
Nightmare scenario, well written Dawn
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Thanks Dee
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Wow, that is cold! A very dark tale from you this week. Well done, but maybe you could add a spritely song to it?
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LOL…okay I will keep that in mind for this week Perry.
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