Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: The Stranger Knows Her Name

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers uses a picture prompt and asks for stories between 75-175 words.

This picture
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Inspired my story:

Jade stopped and stared when she heard the stranger say her name. She looked around the park for a familiar face but although there were plenty of people around none of her friends or their mommy’s were there.

Jade knew she wasn’t supposed to talk to strangers so she kept quiet. She didn’t know, however, what to do if the stranger knew your name.

She studied the man’s face. “Maybe he was a teacher” she thought “Sometimes teachers know your name. Maybe he was one of daddy’s friends. Daddy had lots of friends coming and going all the time. Its how it was so easy to sneak out of the house when he and, mommy were fighting”.

She looked again. No, she didn’t think she knew him. She began to get scared so she ran. She heard the man calling after her but she didn’t dare turn around. She ran as fast as she could all the way home.

21 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers: The Stranger Knows Her Name”

  2. A lot of tension build up in your story. I was so glad that she ran home! I could feel her confusion over not knowing what to do when a stranger knew her name. Excellent story Dawn!

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  6. Clever little girl. I like the way you show her reasoning things out with herself and coming to the decision to run. You built up her fear and tension really well.:)

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  8. A very wise move to run and escape then ask questions later ~ A scary prospect just thinking about the possible outcomes ~ Nice work Dawn 🙂

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  9. Kids are so smart these days. Their little minds race to figure things out. I can see Jade’s thoughts turning in her head.

    Hey! How was the camp out?
    Ellespeth

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