Friday Fictioneers: A Peaceful Drive in the Country

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.

This week’s photo: Copyright: Marie Gail Stafford


And now my 100 word story:

I saw the missed calls and felt the tightness in my chest. I decided to take a drive to clear my head.

“Relationships shouldn’t be this hard” I thought. I spied the interstate and took the southbound ramp. When I hit fifth gear I instructed my blue-tooth to make the call.

“Where have you been?” demanded my worried lover.

“Sorry I missed your call. I was in the shower”

“I called you twice” he reminded me.

I saw my exit and took it. The lovely sound of static emitted from my dash.

“You’re breaking up” I said with a smile and pushed end call.

88 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: A Peaceful Drive in the Country

  1. I’m a bit sorry for the lover, to be dumped via cell phone. But maybe I’m just old-fashioned. 😉 Great piece.


  2. Your last two pieces have been your best. Writing definitely moving up a notch. Think for a while you got stuck in very ‘samey’ sorts of stories. However, moving into something different has seen you get unstuck. See you next week.


    • I got the idea from my son who used to do that to me all the time when he was a teenager. He would crackle in the phone and say “You’re breaking up!”. He thought it was funny. I thought it was a little funny but more irritating. lol


  3. A bit of an adventure ahead, I suspect. Maybe it’s just a temporary shift. She’ll have time to reflect and go back and figure out the issues. Or not.

    (P.S. there’s some issues you may want to address – lovely sounded (sound?) of static emitted and push (pushed?) end call.)


  4. Oh shit. He’s calling back.
    What to do now? Keep ignoring and claim I had dropped the phone in the shower?
    (avoidance only goes so far, as does car rides to clear the mind)

    Good piece. Randy


  5. Nice to get static when you need it rather than having to crumple a crisp packet next to the phone. Not that I’ve done that 😉
    I hope he’s willing to give her the time she needs.


  6. Ah, to hit the road sometimes and feel the wind in one’s hair! Sorry, Mister, no dinner tonight 😉 You certainly portrayed her sense of exhilaration when she saw her exit and took it.


  7. Unfortunately, relationships are ‘this difficult’ at times. And besides, I didn’t like the way he asked her where she’d been – as though she had to account for her time away from him.


  8. I too liked your play on words – “exit” and “breaking up”. Hope she clears her mind and works out what she wants to do next. Great story Dawn.


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