Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.
This week’s photo: © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
And now my 100 word story:
Waking up I see the ornate ceiling and wonder where I am. My head hurts. Why am I laying here? I don’t try to get up, it’s all I can do to open my eyes. There seems to be a lot of noise and it’s getting louder. Someone shines a light in my eyes. I am being pushed and prodded.
I hear 1-2-3 and I am lifted only to be put down again. It’s softer than the floor. What the hell happened? And then I remember the gun. I remember the flash.
The son-of-a-bitch shot me.
The Day After 
Dear Dawn,
Bummer of a way to wake up.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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LOL…true that!
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Awesomely creepy! Excellent build up! Sure am glad she is still alive.
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Yep..thought about killing her off but changed my mind.
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Well she sounds angry enough to survive. I’m hopeful for her.
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That’s exactly where I was going. Thanks Sandra.
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Oh, this is EXCELLENT, Dawn! One of your best I think.
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Thanks Sandra.
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Love that dawn of recognition line! 😀
Love your new header too, Dawn.
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Thank you, on both counts 🙂
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I think a great short word story is one that makes you want to keep reading and this one does just that!
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You are too kind…but I will take it! 😉
Thanks.
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Loved it! Now wondering if a 100 word sequel will find her chasing the son of a bitch down! 🙂
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Hey…cool idea 😉
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Talk about a bad wake up call.
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Worse than a hangover! 😉
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At least it seems not to be fatal…
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Yes, she’ll be back.
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With her own gun I guess 🙂
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Punchy little number. Is this a death bed scene?
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No, Down but not out.
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Ouch. Like the mix between calm and confusion here, Dawn.
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Thank you.
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I imagine waking up after a shooting would be disorientating. Beautifully described!
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Thanks Yolanda.
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We were on the same wave length for this one. Except my character is dead.
DJ
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I was gonna kill her but I just couldn’t. 😉
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Bang!
DJ
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Ouch! What a way to wake up! Good take on the prompt.
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Thank you.
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A rude awakening indeed. Good piece.
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Thanks Mick.
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Not a good way to wake up, but at least he did wake up. 🙂
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Yes, that is ALWAYS good thing 😉
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🙂
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Great shot at the prompt and an intriguing tale. Excellent.
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Thanks Keith.
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Ooh, I want to know everything about what happened before this scene! Great writing!
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Thank you Lorna.
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At least an ornate ceiling wouldn’t be a bad thing to look at. I suppose it could be worse. Nice take, Dawn.
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she seems to be mad as hell. it’s a sign she’d survive.
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Nice description of that “how did I get here?” feeling.
Tracey
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Thanks Tracey.
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Great story that leaves me wondering who is that son of a bitch and why did he shoot her? The confusion came across really well.
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Thanks Irene.
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OMG, nice take on the prompt
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Thanks DeeDee
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Boy, is he going to get it now. I imagine she’ll track him to the ends of the earth once she recovers.
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Yeah,,,bad guy!
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The sudden realisation of having been shot – great lead up to it.
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Thank you.
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I like how you describe the slow dawning of understanding, and the contrast of her anger at the end. Great work.
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Thank you.
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Love the first person tension building here, Dawn! Wow!
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Thanks Dawn
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You’re welcome, Dawn. 😉
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I was about to write exactly what Margaret said. 🙂 Great take on the prompt.
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Thank you.
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It’s interesting how falls and injuries seem to come to mind with a photo prompt such as this one.
All my best,
MG
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Thanks for stopping by MG
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What great storytelling skills you have!
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Oh wow, thanks so much Jan.
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