Friday Fictioneers: Sand Angel

Welcome to Friday Fictioneers where each week close to 100 people participate in a flash fiction challenge based on a photo prompt.

This week’s photo: © Jean L. Hays

This week’s photo: © Jean L. Hays

And now my 100 word story:

Martin thought back on the last few months. He didn’t understand it. He used to be in control. He controlled his wife, his children; his subordinates. He controlled his feelings, his thoughts, and his actions.

He had done it for so long it had become second nature to him but lately he had felt it begin to slip away.

The headaches were getting worse. He wasn’t sure if things slipping away were creating his headaches or his headaches were making things slip away.

He reached into his pocket, pulled out his prescription bottle, popped two pills and swallowed hard.
“That’s better” he told himself.

66 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Sand Angel

  1. Dear Dawn,

    It sounds to me as though Martin needs to lose some control. However if he’s losing his memory, that’s another thing entirely. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  2. Controlling the loss of control with pills, I’m not sure that gets him anywhere. Maybe less control will help more. Great take on the prompt.

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    • Yes, I think that is where I am going with this guy. although I don’t know the role that will play. I am developing this character for later use. He has been the star of each of my Wednesday fiction pieces. I appreciate the comments as that helps in the development of this guy, Martin.

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  4. I’m wondering if he started to lose control before of after he started taking the pills.
    It sounds like he was a bit too controlling to start with, though.

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  5. A far-too-common occurrence. You do a great job of capturing the character and dilemma of a high-powered executive spinning out of control.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

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  6. Losing control will make him fight retaining as much control over others as he possibly can. He doesn’t sound a very nice character. It’s good when you can make a reader dislike a character in so few words.

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  7. Seems they have medicine for just about everything. Heck, you can get medicine to make your eyelashes grow longer! LOL I feel sad for Martin that he is losing control yet he feels in control by taking the medicine.

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  8. If I saw those cars on the drive past, I’d check my medication too 🙂
    Nice – the focus on and loss of control really shows the type of person your character is.

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  9. A slippery slope…I’d agree with Dawn. When you have you’re head in the sand it’s hard to pull yourself out of it and see things how they actually are. I like the bit about the headaches…I know people like this. Do you have a bad lifestyle because of your headaches or because of your lifestyle?

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  10. There’s a certain panic that attacks control freaks when situations arise that they cannot control. I expect the headaches will get worse for Martin. Great story, Dawn.

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