Friday Fictioneers: Fighting Demons

Janet hollered for her husband but he didn’t answer. She looked for him out back and in the garden. “21 days” she thought with a sigh. That’s how long he had been home from rehab. She passed the tool shed and smelled cigarette smoke. She stepped inside. “I’ve been looking for you.”

The ash tray, overflowing with butts, sat on his unused weight bench, he, on an inverted bucket.
“What are you doing out here?”
“Nothing.”
She couldn’t get through to him. She had tried.
“Dinner is ready”

She set the table and waited but he never came in.

This week’s photo: © Nathan Sowers (my grandson)

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67 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Fighting Demons

  1. tense.
    this couple seems to have had one arduous journey….

    and I like the mention of the 21 days (that key number folks suggest can make or break a habit – although it depends)

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      • well let me correct that!
        Some say that it is 21 and research supports some of it – which is why we see so many 21 days of transformation books (like Mark’s Daily Apple has a new book 21 Days of Transformation) the three weeks is a good number to establish new patterns.
        However, author Christine Avanti found in her research that people took anywhere from 18 to 254 Days to form a new habit (or break old ones) with the average being 66 days.
        interesting – huh?

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    • This is at my house, Yvette. He’s a budding photographer so whenever we are together we work on different things. This day we were talking about reflections and I told him about this old mirror i bought. He dug it out, cleaned it up, and went out in the yard to “play”. He posted it on facebook and tagged me in it. That’s where Rochelle found it.

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  2. The photo your grandson took is stimulating some great stories. The last line of your story said so much. I fear for your characters future

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  3. You’ve written this story very well. The image of Janet’s husband sitting on the bucket, chain smoking as he tries to resist temptation, is graphic and conveys a real sense of his struggle. And then you tell us, subtly and obliquely, that he loses the struggle.
    It’s the little details that make this such excellent writing. “unused weight bench” and “inverted bucket”,
    “She couldn’t get through to him. She had tried.” That’s so powerful because of what it doesn’t say. Janet doesn’t scream at him, doesn’t try to persuade him, just serves his meal, and sits and waits.
    “She couldn’t get through to him. She had tried.” And we know that this scene has played out many, many times before. “21 days” He’s been in rehab before, maybe many times. Janet is just bone-weary. She’s standing by her man, but, my God, it’s hard work.
    That’s a terrific story, Dawn. Kudos!

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  4. That shed does look like a good place to hide out in. Im hoping that what he is trying to beat (his addiction) is more harmful than the cigarettes I assume he is using to keep himself from relapsing. Unless of course the addiction is the cigarettes!

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